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your bones are small,
but strong

like your heart,
they've never been broken

oh child,
stay away from the world

oh child,
i hope you never
realize

that dreams only
last for the night
I want everyone to stop growing up right now please and thank you
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Daily Deviation

Given 2014-03-26
Oh Child by Phan5everx2 cuts to the chase that we all try to grow up too fast and don't take the time appreciate our youth until it's too late. ( Suggested by TruthisTruth and Featured by inknalcohol )
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Inchaotus Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Maybe it's not your best, but it is excellent. Getting a Daily Deviation with poetry is practically an impossibility, so it sure is an honor to get one :p
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Phan5everx2 Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
i agree and thank you so much :D i felt very honored :)
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MaryItIs Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
That hit hard, inside here somewhere
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beleave Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2014
too right.
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LindArtz Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014
This lil'  shorty really packs a punch! Congratulations on a very well deserved DD!
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LaughButts Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
;_; This is too depressing for words. 
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dappspalecy Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:''
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XxKraitxX Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014
Harsh and lovely
Great job
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kirakishousakurada Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Professional General Artist
Your poem is beautiful, thank you for sharing it Ralts 
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Saiyanpelt-and-Co Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I badly want ro be a second-grader again, although I'm only twelve. If I could, O wouldgo back and beg me not to do things I want to erase from memory. This poem is so true.
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Phan5everx2 Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thanks :meow:
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blackstar707 Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful in its simplicity. The daily deviation is well deserved! :clap:
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Phan5everx2 Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you ^-^ I'm still in shock about that haha
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iMariposa Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
When you figure out how to do it please let me know!
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Phan5everx2 Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Will do!
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PC-Wolf Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I will forever stay a child in an adults body! even though technically I think I still am a child... but.. ya'know, future reference.
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Phan5everx2 Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Haha I know! :D
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wickedcurly Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014
lovely! congrats!
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Phan5everx2 Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! ^-^
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EuTytoAlba Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014
"That's the real trouble with the world, too many people grow up." - Walt Disney
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Phan5everx2 Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
"all children are artists, the problem is to remain an artist when you grow up" -Pablo Piccaso
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OneDreamOneMoon Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I wish I stopped growing older years back. Reality and the 'adult world' hits you hard in your late teens.
This is wonderfully written, and I love the visuality of this poem
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Phan5everx2 Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Same. It's so true too. Thank you :)
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That1PersonYouForgot Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is really good! Love it~
Congrats on the DD! :heart:
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Phan5everx2 Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! I'm completely floored 0o0
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That1PersonYouForgot Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome! And that's a good thing, right? ^^
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Phan5everx2 Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Yes, definitely yes!
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That1PersonYouForgot Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Good! :thumbsup:
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SuperMastour64 Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Hobbyist
This great, good job!
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Phan5everx2 Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :meow:
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014
Really sweet, congrats!
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Phan5everx2 Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :D
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EroticPoet Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Hobbyist Interface Designer
I like this poem.
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Phan5everx2 Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :D
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StarlightWerewolf Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014
Considering the world now definitly. Sweet in a sad way.
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Phan5everx2 Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I know. :( thank you
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DruDrewDraws Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
a well deserved dd.  short and sweet, and moving too. :)
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Phan5everx2 Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I have no idea why it got a dd, but thank you :D
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toonicling Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congrats for the DD.
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Phan5everx2 Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :)
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tanafeyroyale Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is amazing. It's simple and right to the point and it speaks volumes to the current situation in the world.
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Phan5everx2 Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :) I was hoping so
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DoctorLock Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This piece, so simple and short, is a great visual of potential.  It's very inspirational, moving, and almost has a sad vibe to it as you're reading it.  Thinking about growing up and realizing that the dreams you dreamt the night before are all just illusions that will never really com true, is very sad if you think about it like that.  I've never seen a writer that can fir so much expressions and meaning into a writing piece that is so short; only a few lines long.  If anything in this world is perfect, then this is it.
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Phan5everx2 Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much :blush: I'm so glad that the emotions conveyed. It's so amazing that you think it's perfect... :heart:
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DoctorLock Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome.  The piece you created WAS perfect.  And I don't say that to everyone.  Sure, a lot of people can make beautiful, well written pieces, but this poem is beyond that: the feelings are so well produced throughout the poem, that the reader doesn't even realize it.  The ending, is somewhat sad, or at least has a sad vibe.  Yes, I think this poem is perfect and if anyone tried to critique it, they'd have a really hard time finding flaws.
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Phan5everx2 Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you..so much :heart: I can't believe you took time to tell me this :hug:
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DoctorLock Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
When I see true beauty in a world of imperfections, I can't help myself but stop and tell the beauty of beautiful it actually is.
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Phan5everx2 Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
you are amazing :heart:
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Morticia-Lynne Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014  Student Writer
Stunning work, emotion filled and generally delightful.Great work :D
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