This piece, so simple and short, is a great visual of potential. It's very inspirational, moving, and almost has a sad vibe to it as you're reading it. Thinking about growing up and realizing that the dreams you dreamt the night before are all just illusions that will never really com true, is very sad if you think about it like that. I've never seen a writer that can fir so much expressions and meaning into a writing piece that is so short; only a few lines long. If anything in this world is perfect, then this is it.
You're welcome. The piece you created WAS perfect. And I don't say that to everyone. Sure, a lot of people can make beautiful, well written pieces, but this poem is beyond that: the feelings are so well produced throughout the poem, that the reader doesn't even realize it. The ending, is somewhat sad, or at least has a sad vibe. Yes, I think this poem is perfect and if anyone tried to critique it, they'd have a really hard time finding flaws.