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You took
A knife
to the moon

In the night sky
I saw the pieces
that weren't beautiful
enough
For you

And the farther
They
Fell
The darker they got
they fell away from the light
And joined me
the darkness is meant for unwanted things, so it's fitting i suppose
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TruthisTruth Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I like it, though the last line feels sort of... forced. It just didn't mix well with the rest of the poem. Still, and excellent piece! :clap:
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Phan5everx2 Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you! especially for the feedback, i thought something seemed off, and thats it. Thank you! Hug 
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TruthisTruth Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome! Glad I could help. ^^
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